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Old 01-16-2012, 11:43 AM
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Ok, I think I need help. The story I'm writing involves a 17 y/o girl, her 13 y/o sister, and her 17 y/o male BFF. I've been both 17 y/o and a 13 y/o girl, but I have no experience whatsoever with what might be going on in the mind of the 17 y/o boy character. I could really use some insight, if any of you might be willing to loan me your 16-18 y/o sons (or simply your knowledge of their capacity for meaningful relationships) for research purposes.

My main concern is getting the male character's feelings for the 17 y/o girl correct (he's been head over heels for her since they met in the 5th grade). I'm scared that I may be giving him feelings that are too mature for a boy of his age, and would really like to have someone that could tell me whether I'm writing him realistically or not read a few excerpts.

The plot is fairly dark, and does include some non-graphic sex. Please PM me if you might be able to help me out by either reading a bit of it yourself, or passing it along to your son. Any feedback from your kids can be passed back to me through you, or directly to me via anonymous email or something if they prefer.

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Old 01-16-2012, 11:46 AM
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I would help you, but my 17 yo brother is stuck in the angst part of teenage life and is a beast to talk to anymore.

I do know that he falls hard for every girl he's interested in, but never dates past a couple of months.
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Old 01-16-2012, 11:52 AM
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Lol, teen angst

I hadn't thought to include younger siblings in my call for help. They are of course welcome, too!

And it's not so much that I question a 17 y/o's ability to actually fall for someone, but more that I want to get the thoughts about it that my character has in his head correct. If it makes any difference, a touch of angst might help a test reader get into the character's head, as the 17 y/o girl dies, and most of the thoughts thoughts that I need advice on are from after that point. He's pretty upset, to say the least.
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Old 01-16-2012, 12:14 PM
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I really would loan you my nearly 16-year-old, but he isn't the TYPICAL teen due to abuse and neglect. He really wouldn't be much help.
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Old 01-16-2012, 12:15 PM
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One of my fav ereader apps is wattpad. It's where people publish their WIP's and people can give you feedback on them. That might be something to look into? Some people can be harsh, but for the most part they seem to be helpful in their feedback. I believe they have a website too
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Old 01-16-2012, 01:00 PM
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Well, I'm not sure that I'm ready to unleash my writing on total strangers yet, but I will keep that in mind for when the time comes. Neat idea
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He might stop by today. I can bring the subject up to him.
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In my experience, the depth of emotion and feelings of love can of course be there it's the rational thought and maturity that might be lacking. At 17, you pretty much are who you are, you know? Unless his thoughts are something like "I can never touch the savings that I put away for our future now that she's gone, I will just donate it to charity" and such, I'm sure that it will be fine.
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Old 01-16-2012, 03:25 PM
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In my experience, the depth of emotion and feelings of love can of course be there it's the rational thought and maturity that might be lacking. At 17, you pretty much are who you are, you know? Unless his thoughts are something like "I can never touch the savings that I put away for our future now that she's gone, I will just donate it to charity" and such, I'm sure that it will be fine.
No, it's nothing like that. And really, I just want to know whether or not the way I've worded things are things that a 17 y/o boy would be capable of thinking, KWIM?
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No teenagers, but Robert and I fell in love at 18 (he's 27 now). He's an aspiring writer and has a very twisted, beautiful mind. You never know what's going to come out. He's also in a really weird place right now (might post about that later to explain) so I'm not sure if he'd be up to it. But I'll ask him though, if you want?
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No teenagers, but Robert and I fell in love at 18 (he's 27 now). He's an aspiring writer and has a very twisted, beautiful mind. You never know what's going to come out. He's also in a really weird place right now (might post about that later to explain) so I'm not sure if he'd be up to it. But I'll ask him though, if you want?
That would be awesome, thank you
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